writergirl007

It's good. A little confusing near the end. Read back over it and see where you can clarify it. Keep writing. I'll be back to see the rest of the ...

I think it's really good. I love the beginning. For a moment, however, I could have sworn you were writing something besides Science-Fic. It's wonderful. I really don't see anything ...

It's good. I'm not usually into war things, but I like it. Interesting. You definitely capture your reader. It's just a little too short. I would suggest lengthening it. Maybe ...

First of all I want to say tremendous effort. It takes a lot of courage to post something. A lot of spelling mistakes. Break up your paragraphs, use capitalization and ...

Wow. A lot of language. Hate the language. :evil: Sorry. That's just me. Pretty interesting story, though, if you can get passed that. What are you trying to communicate? Make ...

I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That's a very rare thing for me to say! It's absolutely fantastic! I love the ending. The title is very fitting as well. Keep up the good ...

This is a good story. Not really my style, but good. I found a lot of spelling errors. The main thing I would like to comment is really just a ...

This is good. There are a few spelling errors, but overall, it is a marvelous story. Of course, a story can always use improvement. I suggest that you read over ...

A little confusing, but good. I think you should change tenses to make it more interesting. Don't need the Flash back. Just simply put dots across or something else to ...

I like this story. Very bold and dramatic. Needs more clarification in the first chapter and there is a lot of grammar. I think it has potential. Make sure you ...

Wonderful story. A little fuzzy in the second paragraph and at the end. Needs to be refined some, but a wonderful story so far. Clarification is needed as to whom ...

Good story, but very unclear. Go back and read it. Give more detail. Like where is this happening, what's going on, why are they running? Also, you have several spelling ...

I thought it was good. A little confusion near the bigining, but a good story. Kind of sad though. Make it a little longer with more detail and more describing ...