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not bad, this could be a song that a praise and worship band would like. this reminds me of the Psalms, personally im not so much into alot of the ...

thats the word i was looking for. thanks :-)

This is a poem emulating Gary Soto's "Oranges", about a first experience. This is for my english class, so any critiques are welcome, in fact they are very much appreciated. ...

i would increase the first stanza, add more detail so the reader can really get a feel for the cool wind streaming through their hair. you want the reader to ...

To delve into the heart of trouble, while the matter is still fresh, is to cut open a live alligator’s stomach searching for a swallowed golden watch. The creature screeches ...

good job at continuing this, but there are a few things you need to clear up. first of all, from ur first few chapters the reader gets the impression that ...

i like this alot, i agree that the title gives it away too quickly, but the wildfire analogy is very effective i disagree that it doesnt sound finished, it sounds ...

this is a political statement that i wrote up in math class today. its rough and needs work, so any critique is welcome. I can see nothing here Except an ...

chapters three and four for my book. they're both relatively short. enjoy :-) Chapter Three The worst part about being at home during all this is that no one here ...

im not sure how i feel about this, i like the imagry, but love poems tend to have an air of sappiness, and im afraid this is a tad sappy. ...

oh i didnt think about not being able to see him scratch his head, i can easily rephrase that. and thanks for the squadren info, i was wondering how to ...

ok first of all go back and check for tense mistakes, you have a few. ok i wrote this rly long review where i copied and pasted ur story onto ...

Glancing around a high school campus, the quarrels and achievements are worn on every adolescent face. The courtyard, a social beehive. On the left, tenth grade boys, talking about sports ...

someone on livejournal posted a link to a "great writers website" and i checked it out and i love it :-) then i sent the link to a facebook group ...

this should be longer. i do like the opening with him in the pod or w/e he's in. i'm confused with how he got there though, and whats with the ...