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wow wicked poem and use of rhyme :D :D

thats given me an idea of a alright poem idea thanks for that but thats a brilliant poem :D

that is one wicked poem :D

:thumb: good job i really like Create positive energy. Control your destiny! Take time to smile, that's my fav part

:lol: you should do more poetry

thats a great poem and good use of ryhme

that is really good :D :elephant:

more more more amazing :elephant:

](*,) d'oh that got me thinking about chocolate and i don't have any :(

i like it but i think you could change it abit not much though :)

( i like i like) this bit is good The world is moving fast, quaking like volcanic eruption mania disease the poem is excellant 8)

i like the use of rhyme keep it up 8)

8) wicked i like the bit where it says I look at him with humane rage thats cool

its alright if its short because it was still good

i didn't exactly see the first chapter but i think that this one's gggggggrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeaaaaaaatttttt :D