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Akan I like your use of metaphors you are a good writer. i wonder if you could have drawn out the story to make it longer. Over all a good ...

Your story is solidly written. I wonder if you could have less dialogue it takes up allot of space. I also think the beginning was good it creates a good ...

Your story is solidly written. I wonder if you could have less dialogue it takes up allot of space. I also think the beginning was good it creates a good ...

Your story is solidly written. I wonder if you could have less dialogue it takes up allot of space. I also think the beginning was good it creates a good ...