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Re: Ms. Apt Diagnosis
I loved your imagery. Let’s lie in fields of feline flowers where the blades pierce and the whiskers tickle— whiskers tickle sounds a bit awkward, but I'm not sure what ...
May 4, 2008 -
Re: Dead?
This was actually kind of creepy. But I liked it. The description is very good, especially at the beginning. I love the way you describe her after she was hit ...
May 4, 2008 -
Re: God of the Underworld: Chapter 1: (revised)
Hello! I’m Jordan. How are you? Now that we know each other, I can help you out a bit. The first thing I noticed was a whole lot of info-dumping ...
May 4, 2008 -
Re: Pretty Much...
My name is Jordan, and I found this site while looking for a lovely place to discuss writing. I’ve found one- yes? Anyway, please excuse me if I act insane. ...
May 4, 2008