Hi Chazzer! I can find only two little mistakes. (I love the icon, by the way.)
chazzer wrote:I’m a child in the corner and I’m scared. I am scared. You’re the lost cause that I love and I’m aware. I’m aware:
In the first "I'm scared," you use a contraction. In the repetition of this phrase, you don't. So, following this patter, why don't you change the second "I'm aware" to "I am aware"?
chazzer wrote:Question questions yourself
"Yourself" should be "you."
Overall, I love the topic of this poem. John F. Kennedy for the win! I don't think your rhymes are too simplistic at all! Remember, though, a song doesn't have to rhyme to be wonderful! A great example of a non-rhyming song is "Across the Universe," by the Beatles. Anyway, good job!
I like nonsense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living, it's a way of looking at life through the wrong end of a telescope. Which is what I do, and that enables you to laugh at life's realities. — Dr. Seuss
