All critiques (no matter how harsh) are definitely appreciated on the above story and any of the following chapters! I'll return any critique I receive to the best of my ability Thanks in advance!
Everyone's digging up old topics today! I guess kitty15's challenge is having effect.
In any case, this should have been locked already. The best to get critiques is by critiquing someone else's work then asking them to return the favor.
There are those who say that life is like a book, with chapters for each event in your life and a limited number of pages on which you can spend your time. But I prefer to think that a book is like a life, particularly a good one, which is well to worth staying up all night to finish. — Lemony Snicket