A Dragon's Revenge (short story)

J. Haux · 2005-10-20T00:57:18Z

His silvery eyes gleamed in the light of the flaming tower. The furious dragon whipped his long, thin spiked tail right in front of my shield. Golden spines were placed on the back of his long copper neck. All of the other knights gasped as I told the story. I continued. I ran for my life. He lumbered after me. I turned around and, with my shield protecting my body, I drew my sword and fought with that wild beast for hours. Finally he blew a huge flame and ruined my shield! I didn't run. I was brave and stood up to him. That beast wasn't just huge, but powerful. As his tail whizzed past me once again, I dropped my sword and ran. I, for the first time in my whole life, wished that I had never become a knight. It was too hard. I came to a small wooden bridge. I ran across it. As soon as I reached the other side, I would be safe. Well, the dragon knew that and he didn't want it to happen. He took a deep breath and blew enough fire to burn down a whole town. Sure enough, just as I stepped off the bridge, it fell. With that he blew one last bit of flame. This time it really did hit me. So that is why I don't have any hair, eyebrows, or eyelashes at this very moment. [i]Hi I'm Jaquie's little sister, Searria. I haven't been accepted into the society, because I'm only ten. Jacquie: She wrote this when she was nine. So be nice. Searria's sensitive. Whoops...that made her mad. :lol: Anyway...I've signed her up, but she hasn't been accepted yet... Searria: Yet. :twisted: Jacquie: As I was saying, she hasn't been accepted, and she got impatient, so I'm kindly allowing her to temporarily write under [i]my name. So. This is hers. Be considerate, helpful, but not mean, and age appropriate. Please? Searria: *glares at Jacquie* then *giggles*

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Mon Dec 19, 2005 4:04 am

Jessie Hartman says... · Mon Dec 19, 2005 4:04 am

I enjoyed it. Nice work. I could say more, but my criticism is rarely intellingent, much less constructive, so I won't bore you. YOu probably won't see this anyway. Oh well.

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Mon Dec 19, 2005 4:28 am

J. Haux says... · Mon Dec 19, 2005 4:28 am

Uh, hi Jessie.

I see you!

~Jacquie~

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Sun Feb 19, 2006 8:57 pm

Fireweed says... · Sun Feb 19, 2006 8:57 pm

Wow, that's ace for a nine-year old!!

I love it how in the begginning, you think that it's actually happening,and then it turns out to be the knght telling a story. I also love the line at the end, heh heh. That's quotable.

This is a very entertaining story, Searria, and you and your sister's commentary is, too. Nice work on this. Hope to see you around YWS when you get your own account!!!

"I myself am composed entirely of flaws, stitched together with good intentions."- Augusten Burroughs

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