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Ode to Burnt Toast

Fangala the Flying Feline · 2007-10-02T00:55:52Z

Suddenly my nostrils fill with a most alarming smell like something cooking, something dead. I realize I've burnt the bread. Now a disk of lava rock it delivers a tasteless shock to tastebuds filled with disappointment. I think this calls for an ointment like globs of jelly, strawberry jewels-- toppings are a baker's tools. Onion cream cheese, caviar, melted butter from a jar. Will this toast escape detection if it is masked by these confections? Through the jellied pool of fruit, you can't tell it's black as a root. Crusty as an iron ring, bitterness makes our throats sting. Unidentified blackened bits might have been raisins or walnut pits. The wheat is scorched the rye is dry all flavor evaporates into the sky. Once a perfect slice of heaven, I kneaded you, I watched you leaven. I dusted you with cloudy yeast, but now you are a stony beast. You could pave a sidewalk or survive at the sun's molten core. Because you cannot be defeated, the package lied; the toaster cheated. Jackhammers buckle on your face, Spartans grimace at your taste. Because my toaster went amok, you'd make a sturdy hockey puck. I wash you with a load of reds; now the clothes are torn to shreds. I wash you with a lot a soap; the washer broke--is there no hope? Stop it, toast! You are so cruel! Now I feel like a fool. Why do you mock me? Tell me, tell! you demonic toast from hell. I wasted all my jam on you and now I don't know what to do, so I will eat a wheat tortilla or some pasta--mama mia!

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Sat Jan 12, 2008 1:38 am

annabanana says... · Sat Jan 12, 2008 1:38 am

A very interesting topic, i love it! It was deffinatelt random that's 4 sure.
I loved the beat in your poem. you're very creative! keep that up.

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Sat Jan 12, 2008 2:09 am

written_on_my_heart says... · Sat Jan 12, 2008 2:09 am

almost as good as the last and I must say that I will check up on your new additions! Maybe as a formal request you could make an ode to a moldy sandwhich? I would love to see that on the forum!

"Am I that obvious? And if it's written on my face... I hope it never goes away." Pieces of me, Ashlee Simpson

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Sat Jan 12, 2008 4:01 am

xhalcyonx128 says... · Sat Jan 12, 2008 4:01 am

Oh my gosh, this absolutely made my day ^.^

This is the only problem i spotted:

or some pasta--mama mia

i think 'maybe' would work better than 'some', but thats your choice.

thats all!

MAJOR kudos on this :-)

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Sat Jan 12, 2008 11:47 pm

ninja-Z says... · Sat Jan 12, 2008 11:47 pm

WOW. thats all i can say cause thats the weirdest thing ive ever read. but yeah, its pretty good, i suppose. are all your poems this weird?(this does not require an answer.)

NEway, CU Round!

-Z

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