The 12 hour love story

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Erm. I'm confused.
Beckah is the... daughter?
And Merde is the... mom? or some foreign language word?
Sorry, I'm kinda dumb :D

I thought the daughter had a boyfriend... and now she's fallen in love with Riley?
O_O
Or did I see wrongly?
12 hours IS kind of short to be so sure that you've fallen in love with someone.
But it was explained quite well, because she showed him kindness etc...

Quite an abrupt ending, like everyone has pointed out,
But the story was sweet. Very sweet.
Good try! Keep up the awesome work!
- I don't think I can even write that well XD
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