I loved the fatal attraction part at the end(:. I thought this story was put togetrher in a hurry and should be in more detailed and more lengthy. I love how you make your points but I think you could add more to it, and it could be alot better. I loved how you wrote it. Good job.
I love how it's written in "poem form". It's very interesting and it explains a lot. I didn't find any mistakes but overall I thought it was really good. :3
The wince that you wince when you see your quote in the quote generator is quite a wince, I tell ya. To know that the whole YWS community has read and judged your quote is quite an awkward feeling like oh noes.
*manly blush* — Arcticus
