Haiku Battle

Lumi · 2011-02-04T00:28:34Z

Note: This is not in need of reviews as it is not a literary work. This is a game-type activity. Here's a poetry exercise to sharpen our description with as few words as possible. Could that mean Haiku? That's right, folks. We here at the poetry forum are gonna duke it out--not with swords or guns, but with words. Seventeen syllables worth, to be precise. If you're not aware of what a Haiku is, here's a quick note: Haiku is a form of poetry consisting of three lines, respectively measuring 5/7/5 in beats. A Haiku is typically about nature, and more often than not denotes a particular season in which the poem takes place (though it doesn't have to, by any means). They're beautiful things, and, while small, can take masterful lyricists to craft. Senryu are similar, although they deal with more human ideas/emotions/situations. They're my personal favorite. Same format. So this is our battle, poets! The task is simple: merely post a Haiku or Senryu. The major hitch of the exercise is that the first line of your poem must feed off of the last line of the one above yours. The entire poem may be different, but they'll all be connected. One huge Poem Chain. To begin: Downpours in the south make rivers strong as wildfire; April boasts its strength.

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Tue Jul 05, 2011 5:09 am

Karzkin says... · Tue Jul 05, 2011 5:09 am

This empty expanse;
Just me, the night, and freedom.
"Get off the road, fool!"

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Tue Jul 05, 2011 5:43 am

SubjectBlue says... · Tue Jul 05, 2011 5:43 am

a mountain in white
snow flakes dancing in the wind
winter's sun at dusk

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Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:38 pm

catslikebooks2 says... · Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:38 pm

Calm flowing river
meanders through the forest
providing water

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Thu Jul 21, 2011 11:04 pm

Lumi says... · Thu Jul 21, 2011 11:04 pm

For all I've given,
I beg of you to come back.
I'm dead without you.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

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Fri Jul 22, 2011 6:29 am

FruityBickel says... · Fri Jul 22, 2011 6:29 am

Swaying in the wind;
Harmless as a newborn lamb.
The Rose blooms in Spring

The Rooms Have Turned Us Cold.

That Neon Exit Sign

The Death of Foreverville / The Demise of Kunaedal Kingdom

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Sun Jul 31, 2011 6:42 am

TheModernist says... · Sun Jul 31, 2011 6:42 am

Bent low and forlorn
roses will droop unnoticed.
Winter is loveless

There's no rain there's no me, I'm tellin' ya man sure as shit. - From Poem by Jack Kerouac

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Mon Aug 01, 2011 6:18 am

noninjaes says... · Mon Aug 01, 2011 6:18 am

Winter is loveless
Cold and bitter nights of snow
Yearning for Springtime

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Thu Aug 04, 2011 8:35 pm

shadowraiki says... · Thu Aug 04, 2011 8:35 pm

Their death will haunt me
Forever and forever
Memories remain

If words are just letters put together, why do we decide on what they mean?

I step away from the grammar to review the story.

I don't do poetry.

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Thu Aug 11, 2011 2:18 am

Lumi says... · Thu Aug 11, 2011 2:18 am

When I write Haiku,
and count every last beat,
I count on my toes.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

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Thu Aug 11, 2011 3:09 am

Mikko says... · Thu Aug 11, 2011 3:09 am

Because never will
My ten fingers be enough
To count all of them.

when she needs to shelter from reality she takes a dip in my daydreams

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Tue Aug 16, 2011 3:13 am

Lumi says... · Tue Aug 16, 2011 3:13 am

From heaven, light falls;
fresh is the rain that cleanses
the poet of sins.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.

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Fri Sep 16, 2011 2:47 pm

Karzkin says... · Fri Sep 16, 2011 2:47 pm

The poet is lost:
Washed away by the torrent
Of his catharsis.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Fri Sep 23, 2011 3:23 pm

Lumi says... · Fri Sep 23, 2011 3:23 pm

Like a wind comes love:
roused in the heart like blown leaves,
gone with the northern.

I am a forest fire and an ocean, and I will burn you just as much
as I will drown everything you have inside.

-Shinji Moon

I am the property of Rydia, please return me to her ship.