That's pretty cool. The only thing I could really saw about it is did Jojo ask you to use brown and white for her name because it just seems a little plain to me. I would use another color instead of brown but other than that it's pretty cool.
Maybe what most people wanted wasn't immortality and fame, but the reassurance that their existence had meant something. No matter how long... or how brief. Maybe being eternal meant becoming a story worth telling. — Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality
