Sky Of Smoke- Chapter Two

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Yay!

I really like this next part!

The description is good, and the characters are evolving nicely! It's way better than the first chapter!

Keep it up.

I did notice some grammar mistakes, but i don't remember what they were!

Can't wait to read the next part!

~Rogue Jedi Master Timea
"Look, Ma. No hands"
"You haven't got a ma."
"Maybe a nice old lady will adopt me. I'm very loveable."
―Fi and Darman



Maybe what most people wanted wasn't immortality and fame, but the reassurance that their existence had meant something. No matter how long... or how brief. Maybe being eternal meant becoming a story worth telling.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality