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Lauren2010
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Thu Jan 28, 2010 10:11 pm
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Thu Jan 28, 2010 10:11 pm
Thanks to everyone who reviewed! This is currently being rewritten.
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Sun Jan 31, 2010 6:22 am
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Sun Jan 31, 2010 6:22 am
At first I thought that Natura's name was Naruto, HAHAHAHA Ignore that anyway so.....critique time. I really think that this is good, I mean it is short and has a few grammer mistakes but still I really liked it. Nice names to....very different!
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 3:31 pm
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Sun Feb 07, 2010 3:31 pm
Hey Lauren,
Great Chapter! I'm really enjoying this lovely tale so far. As far as 'grammar' mistakes, I only noticed one:
The conversation didn’t help to keep the nightmare at bat.
Um, I think you mean at 'bay'?
That's it for now, it was excellent, I'm going to the next!!
Tanya
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