Get over it my friend ch 1

myfreindsavamp · 2008-05-01T00:37:43Z

Review:-Jess has just broken up with a boy and left for the weekend away from school while Draive has some how managed to bump into a Gorgeous boy, while spilling his lunch of course... "I'm so sorry about that! Can I buy you another one?" She asked. He was cute, that would have to be compensation for her loss in money. "Oh no you don't have to...." He scratched the back of his head... (now on to the first chapter!) "I um...." The boy said thinking aloud. "I got it but while I have some one, can you show me around school Monday?" He asked as a teacher scurried to get the mess cleaned up. "Ya sure." She answered. A new student? Even better! Her mind screamed as she walked down the hall. _______________________________________________________________ That night she lay in bed, her hair spewed across her bed. She thought she could sense an accent as she replayed the scene over and over in her head. She'd have to find out on Monday. Oh well. She thought as she turned over and swept her mind into sleep. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

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Mon May 05, 2008 11:35 pm

myfreindsavamp says... · Mon May 05, 2008 11:35 pm

She was shaken away the next morning by one of her [s]good[/s] friends, Jess.

*fixed*

I wouldn't say that Jess is a good freind....

We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:18 am

Maki-Chan says... · Tue May 06, 2008 1:18 am

I liked this ^_^ If you just correct what TN pointed out. Also just do spell check.

Nice job Amber ^_^

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:20 am

myfreindsavamp says... · Tue May 06, 2008 1:20 am

Ya I'm pretty sure I've put this thing through the spell check 50 times.
^-^Thank you ch 2 will be coming onto the site tonight if I canget enuff points. That's doubt ful though.

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:56 am

LunaBuna43 says... · Tue May 06, 2008 1:56 am

Yay! Awesome Amber-chan! Can't wait for chapter two!
*Does a dance*
Awesome Amber-chan!

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Tue May 06, 2008 1:58 am

myfreindsavamp says... · Tue May 06, 2008 1:58 am

Thank you.Thank you. *bows*^-^

We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
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Tue May 06, 2008 10:52 am

spaced_out says... · Tue May 06, 2008 10:52 am

it was interesting.

The plot was good, but have more romance.

the grammar was, good.

you just need a little more romance.
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Tue May 06, 2008 11:17 am

myfreindsavamp says... · Tue May 06, 2008 11:17 am

The romance will come trust me.

We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet

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