Until The End-Part 1

~Make sure you check out the preface. Negative reviews are welcomed. Well, enjoy! ~

Part 1

Vacation

When I heard the news
that my parents were going on
vacation. I was jumping for joy.
“Hailey, your father and I decided we wanted
another honeymoon. Is that fine with you?”
Mother asked in a rhetorical question.

Later that day, dad told me they are planning to
go on a cruise. How nice. Wish I went. Not.
I rolled my blue eyes as I giggled to my
unspoken thought.

I do wonder who I'll be staying with. There are
no relatives close by, that I know of. Maybe...
Oh, I don't know.

The Move

In the next city over, I move in with
my Grandma Essie, who I haven't seen in
ages. Her husband is long gone and has
kids who are already grown up. I wonder
what it'll be like visiting her.

“Hailey, my dear.” She squeezes my
cheeks, until they hurt. I give a happy smile
even though I am not in the mood.
“Grandma, it's great to see you, again.”
She raises a dark brow at my dry sarcasm.

“Come give me a hug.” I put my suitcase on the
pavement and walk over. She wraps her long bony
arms around me and squeezes. A second passes and we
back away. I look up at Grandma Essie and see her
emerald eyes. “Welcome home, Hailey.”

This is a cute exchange between grandmother and granddaughter...but I feel like I'm missing something...? In the first part of this, you say her parents are going on a cruise. That means they'll be back in like two weeks. Then, the second part, you say she is going to live with her grandmother...? Do you mean permentantly or not? I would really try to make that clearer.

But otherwise, another good chapter. Would have liked to hear more of her thoughts on why she wouldn't want to go on a cruise...but yeah.

Keep on writing!

Wow, again, this is just ... wow... awesome work!! I love how you've layed this out, so very original, well done you haha. I love it!! Off to read the next part ...

--Lucyy xx