No name yet Help would be loverly

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(intro)
Down in my heart I feel a dart
This dart pierces me more than anyone else

If I said I love you, would you say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

These answers tear me apart,
Making me feel like I don’t belong,
Maybe I was never meant to love,
I might as well not try.

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

These thoughts of me without you,
Crush me and my spirits,
I might be dense and you love me as well,
This drives me to try.

A light of hope fills me
I start to believe its not me
This is how I feel
If you don’t love me

Tell me, tell me, tell me,
Don’t say no and later come back

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

I don’t care!! For either way.
I still Love you and your still there

So, if you are still there I will love you just as much,

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same,
If I said I love you, would you wanna be friends,

So that is all I have to say,
So I'll let you on your way
Last edited by Poetriez on Fri Apr 14, 2006 6:49 am, edited 1 time in total.
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This dart pierces me more than anyone one else


Do you want the extra "one"?

If I said I love you, would u say stay the same


I would suggest using the full word "you," just for literacy's sake.

I don’t care!! For either way.
I still Love you and your still there


Check your punctuations in this.

So ill let you on your way


*I'll*

Other than that, my general lyrics suggestion, without having heard the song, would be to check that your syllables seem fairly comfortable- flowing and not too forced.

Sorry, I really can't think of a title.

I'd like to hear this song!

DG
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thanks I forgot to spell check it and stuf fhaha
War is war
Nothing else
Nothing more

-J.G. Follett



It is only a novel... or, in short, only some work in which the greatest powers of the mind are displayed, in which the most thorough knowledge of human nature, the happiest delineation of its varieties, the liveliest effusions of wit and humour, are conveyed to the world in the best-chosen language
— Jane Austen, Northanger Abbey