what do you think

you and me together...
we'll be free forever...

thought it was a fairytail
but it aint so oh well

but we cant be free...
but we cant be free

'cause I'm stuck in this trap of a world...
along with every other boy and girl...

without you
without you
without you...

'cause you got in a car crash
I had to go to your funeral
It'll never be the same

without you
without you
without you...

'cause I'm stuck in this trap of a world...
along with every other boy and girl...

without you
without you
without you...

Hey! Your song is short but you seem like you have a pretty good idea of writing songs! But you need a hook and for it to flow. Ryhyming would help to! Keep writing and God bless!!













"They can because, they think they can"

Thanks for all of your ideas! It really means a lot to me and it helps me so much. God bless you too and you know he does.

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((Man, it's hard to review songs when you have a song stuck in your head ))


I liked this song. It was short, sweet, and simple, which I value in a song. It was really bittersweet and cute. The only thing I can say is maybe indicate what notes are held out, if any are. What I do to indicate this is just put an ellipse after the word so like 'I love you...' the 'you' would be held out.
I can't really say much about the rhythm because I have a song stuck in my head, (Happy Ending by Mika, I recommend it ). Overall nice job

((PM me if you have any question or need anything! ))

-Carly