Embers

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Would you mind if I kept this memory
’Till the end of time?
Remember you once you've forgotten me
One day, years from now
When I look behind
Try to recall a face that I can't see
What it should be

And as we drift nearer to the ending
Our time slips away
One day closer to our last goodbye
When I file away all my pictures
Tell myself someday
I'll find you again but I'll know its a lie
Call out but no reply

A flame that's just been extinguised
The embers stray
Desperately trying to stay alive
But I know it won't be long before
They smoulder away
And float off towards the skies
A lonely sunrise
Song Of The Day: "Two Cents Worth" by Kansas




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To be honest, it does nothing for me. I can't imagine it set to music and flowing- it seems more like a poem than a song. I think you should add some sort of chorus, or a repeated line; there seems to be o central theme, no idea that runs right the way through it. I think if there was a chorus between these verses, it's be a rather nice song. =)



More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes