This story remained on my mind for days after reading, and I still find myself thinking about it every now and then. It even gave me a form of nightmare the first night. So good job! I found it very original, with every element in the story put there for a reason. Everything wove together nicely. I agree that the paragraphs were a little too big for easy, pleasurable reading. And also I feel that the ending was a little too quick and cheesy. Maybe you could have been a little more detailed in the murder scene? But still, I liked this one. Good job!
The grand in the hotel rings with broken tunes; the guests frown; the concierge winces. But the blue-hatted boy is happy and braver than they. — TheMythMaster