Confession

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Starting a poem with the phrase "dead body" is certainly a way to draw people in. The bit: "Know that a stranger can disappear into a mid-sized city" seemed a little off; "mid-sized" seemed more specific than the rest of the description. I liked the comparison of "unmade beds" to "shallow graves" at the end. Thumbs up in all, but I've liked others better.




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nice. you've got some awesome similes in here, it really makes the poem. i found the shifting focus a little off-putting, the way the object is sort of unclear...in the first stanza for example, it's the man who draws maps, then you seem to be speaking to the reader. it's really a minor point. this is a powerful work
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Who cares about the details? Poerty is not all about details...So is this something of your life? that You experienced? It sucks!
What if I loved you, would you care? What if I left one day, would you care? What if I never came back, would you care? What if I died, would you care?



I have lived through much, and now I think I have found what is needed for happiness. A quiet secluded life in the country, with the possibility of being useful to people to whom it is easy to do good... then rest, nature, books, music, love for one's neighbor - such is my idea of happiness.
— Leo Tolstoy