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Crysi
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 7:08 am
Crysi says... · Mon Jul 18, 2005 7:08 am
Ooh, I like it. Especially the last two lines. :)
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Elizabeth
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 9:00 am
Elizabeth says... · Mon Jul 18, 2005 9:00 am
Hehe, here's something I finally understood [stupid me...]
I saw nothing really wrong, thats because my eyes are tired, but I read it still and it's very very nice. And I do aggree with Crysi, I love the last 2 lines.
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Firestarter
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Mon Jul 18, 2005 3:54 pm
Firestarter says... · Mon Jul 18, 2005 3:54 pm
Easy to read, easy to understand, easy to relate to...good stuff.
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Ieatworms
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Thu Jul 21, 2005 4:44 am
Ieatworms says... · Thu Jul 21, 2005 4:44 am
You have a avery clear voice and tone, as well as strong imagery. I would suggest rethinking the lines referencing the hallway. It dates you and the poem to school years. Poetry should be timeless.
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