for Nick, 'Tendrils of Gaze' (needs work...)

You are so very fragile that I feel forced
to suffocate you in bubblewrap and enclose you
in a cardboard box (this side up) and send
you (my poetry) through UPS, addressed to me.

tsk tsk tsk naughty little you
poor mail man

nice work you sack of brad

Is this too short, too sympathetic, or just bad all around? I can't decide.
Nick's picture is on my blog.

not too short, not too sympathetic and not bad.
And I saw his pic.

happy now?

Yes, I am.

The last stanza made me laugh...marshmallow...hehe. Maybe something like 'wax'? I'm not sure. The marshmallow makes it sound très stupid.

Eh... It was kind of sappy... I know, I shouldn't be one to talk about sappiness... Lovely, I guess I can say, yet it made me laugh throughout... but it's not bad or short.

hm...who is this Nick...

*goes to brads blog*