Yesterday & Tomorrow

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Sooo, nobody who has read this poem of mine, can really make any sense of it. I don't even know what it's about, I just wrote a stanza and the rest of it basically wrote itself. Tell me what you think. Feel free to give me criticism. You gotta love critics. :D

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I sit and gaze
into my numb future,
not so far away.
I reminisce my past of tomorrow.

Who knew,
Literal is the same as suicidal.
Love is the same as hate.
And we're all that's left of tomorrow.

I hold my hand in yours,
cold burning through my veins.
What happened yesterday doesn't matter.
Plan ahead, think of tomorrow,
Because we're all that's left of that fateful day.

I sit alone,
alone in myself,
looking for my lost one,
in my numb future.
Close enough away,
I reminisce my past of tomorrow,
though I'm all that's left of yesterday.




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Hello,
This is quite cool, I mean it's superb!
I would like to say that you need to add in more poetic language. Don't worry, most poems have a very secret meaning. They're like paintings in a way, very mysterious, it could be about anything!
Anyway, hope you carry on with your poems!
Well done!
~Tamara
Someone told me there's a girl out there, with love in her eyes and flowers, in her hair.



You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up.
— Metatron (Supernatural)