All the Time

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Elmoroxmysox
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Wed Oct 13, 2010 4:57 pm
Elmoroxmysox says... · Wed Oct 13, 2010 4:57 pm
Please comment and tell me what u think!




You stand me up
All the time
My heart is hurting all the time
You hurt me all the time
I cry all the time
You don’t care
But I do
You don’t see
You don’t hurt
But I do
All the time
You are whole
You haven’t shattered
I’m not whole
I have shattered
You don’t cry
You don’t wait
You run right past me and don’t even stop to wave good-bye
I try to catch you but I run out of steam
The steam you get from love
The steam only true love can give
I had a lot from you once
But I guess you stopped giving it to me along time ago
So I guess that means I should too.
Last edited by Elmoroxmysox on Wed Oct 13, 2010 5:38 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Funkymomo
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Wed Oct 13, 2010 4:58 pm
Funkymomo says... · Wed Oct 13, 2010 4:58 pm
You run right past me ad don’t even stop to wave good-bye
And, elmo, not ad
Light one candle instead of cursing the darkness.
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Fortissimo
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Wed Oct 13, 2010 7:42 pm
Fortissimo says... · Wed Oct 13, 2010 7:42 pm
very good! what was your inspiration to write a meaningful poem such as this?
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Funkymomo
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Wed Oct 13, 2010 8:42 pm
Funkymomo says... · Wed Oct 13, 2010 8:42 pm
That's better. Now it's perfect! You could win an award for this! I like the feeling of it too.
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Fri Oct 15, 2010 1:54 am
Kwantack says... · Fri Oct 15, 2010 1:54 am
Coolio! I think 'along' is supposed to be 'a long' but other than that, it looks great! I enjoyed reading this. Good job.
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I say Wolf, for all wolves are not of the same sort; there is one kind with an amenable disposition – neither noisy, nor hateful, nor angry, but tame, obliging and gentle, following the young maids in the streets, even into their homes. Alas! Who does not know that these gentle wolves are of all such creatures the most dangerous!
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