The Worst Feeling

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Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:16 am
cali34rniasummer says... · Sat Mar 05, 2011 9:16 am
--> hi! :3

--> since the others have given out the corrections already, all that I could suggest is try to let the words rhyme with each other.. :3 well, I think this one kinda sound good though some of the last words of each line doesn't rhyme. :3 Sorry if I cannot give you a better review than this but I believe that you can d o it and improve this. :)

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“Such nonsense!" declared Dr Greysteel. "Whoever heard of cats doing anything useful!" "Except for staring at one in a supercilious manner," said Strange. "That has a sort of moral usefulness, I suppose, in making one feel uncomfortable and encouraging sober reflection upon one's imperfections.”
— Susanna Clarke, Jonathan Strange & Mr Norrell