The poem was great. I really enjoyed it. I liked how the stanza were short and got to the point. And the poem was written very well and it put me in a happy mood, (because I tried to bake a cake and usually it works, but I forgot to and vinegar so it didn't turn out right) so keep writing,
I'm oxygen potassium! What's life without adventure?
I love this poem! It has a strong message that people understand and (unfortunately) endure every day. The rhyme scheme is simple, but that works well for the poem. Maybe try experimenting with different styles and techniques until you come up with something that is 100% you. Keep writing! This is excellent!
"I don't cause commotions, I am one." Elphaba (Wicked the musical)
More than anything she wanted the world to be uncomplicated, for right and wrong to be as easily divided as the black and white sections of an Oreo. But the world was not a cookie. — Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Tree of Wishes
