i didn't get the point of the poem, really, except for the end. then again i'm multitasking the the maximum.... but i loved all your references to color, which relate so well to nature, hiking, etc. it all ties in. all in all - beautiful imagery. and the ending...wow. great. it made you think =]
my favorite reference to color:
glistening flame-tangerine shriek
you know what i realize? you must HATE critiques. you NEVER get anything useful from us.
Surround yourself with people who are serious about being writers, and who will tell you, ‘Hey—you can do better than this.’ Who will be critical of your work, but also supportive. And who will not be competitive in a negative way. — Isabel Quintero