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Kyeiro
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Wed Oct 31, 2007 4:03 pm
Kyeiro says... · Wed Oct 31, 2007 4:03 pm
Face to face,
I fell apart,
As vowels go,
I said a lot,
Don't you let,
Those lights go low,
I don't think I,
Can stay,
Can handle,
Can stand the show.
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bookworm201
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Sat Nov 03, 2007 1:38 am
bookworm201 says... · Sat Nov 03, 2007 1:38 am
Powerful message, but the commas are disruptive.
GReat contact with your emotion.
"reading one book is like eating one potato chip."
-diane duane in so you want to be a wizard
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Kim
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Mon Nov 12, 2007 4:28 pm
Kim says... · Mon Nov 12, 2007 4:28 pm
this is awesome, but i to would remove the commas, it would read easier.
keep going,

kim
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