(I'm) A Shadowed Girl

Nice poetry! Could you make it a tiny bit longer? Nice job anyway. Loved the story.

I also liked this poem a lot and I feel that it can really relate other kids who are your age at the time you wrote this. Aside from the other nit-picky things mention earlier, I want to ask if your use of "sheen" was done purposefully. I can't decide whether I like or not (not that my opinion should matter much to you ). I feel that it is an unexpected word and that's why I like it, but then I can't overlook the thought that a better word could have been used (perhaps "shine"). I realize, though, that you did not edit this poem from its original form, so thumbs up for preserving the innocence! Over all, I liked it a lot.

Hi there!

I liked this poem, even though it was a tad depressing. This was really powerful, and I got a mental picture of a girl hiding in an alleyway. Trust me, that's a good thing!

Anyways, I liked this poem. I want to see what your poems look like when they're not about something depressing! Just kidding!

Nice job.

~Amfli
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