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You really nailed it with your interpretation! And your feedback is incredibly helpful :) I think with the title, I wasn’t sure what to call it so I settled on ...

for being written in 48 hours, it's definitely great!

i presssed send too early and had to edit that oops

OKAY FINALLY REPSONDING SORRYYY IT should be Mayflower Park with a capital, you are correct! Your ship idea is very cool, though at this stage i don't think there are ...

ALSO YES HE'S VERY INSPIRED BY SPIKE I LOVE SPIKE!! I even had a character in an old abandoned novel of mine who becomes a vampire and called himself Spikey ...

tysm for your review!! I think you are right about needing a beat between the shooting and the meeting i work on an industrial estate, and we have a Greggs! ...

does it change to that when you edit this draft? It's probably just a typo and you can edit it out.

Thanks, but I'm not sure you should have marked this as a review, maybe just a comment? Because it's taken it out the greenroom, others who would leave real reviews ...

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Hi! Hope you are doing well today/tonight/whatever time it is for you! This poem reads to me like an accusation aimed at a god, or some sort of chosen one, ...

I’m glad!! I do really love your writing and the sort of stories you tell. Very realistic and gritty.

Omg I am going to fire my editor (grammarly) Because boor shur instead of door shut is so embarrassing and I just went and checked my document and GRAMMARLY HADNT ...

I think with the door what I meant was it was better to pick the lock quietly than just kick it open as boys might usually have done but I ...

Omg thank you for catching thatv!! How embarrassing lol

@junebug, there's a part that says '. Every critique, review, or piece of criticism of this work must include the word 'bananas' at least once' which seems to some sort ...

thank you so much for the review! I appreciate the feedback, and I think you're right about this being a better 2nd chapter (just need to straighten out a lot ...