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  • Poetry » General, General Re: Nymphs

    It's been a long time since I've read a rhyming poem! And it's been an even longer time since I've read an A/B rhyming poem! And it's been LONGER STILL ...

    Sep 10
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Satire Re: The Window - The 1st Letter

    This is really very well written, with barely any areas of improvement. I shan't compliment you mercilessly, though, out of respect to your ego ;D. What works well: - Mood ...

    Sep 10
  • Short Story » Narrative, Realistic Re: Where?

    It's my first time, please be nice I shall be as nice as I can, while still being truthful ;D Let's start with the positives. I think you've done really ...

    Sep 10
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Fantasy Re: Chapter 7

    I read this through, for no real reason lol. This is not the kinda stuff I read at all! That being said, it's such a good example of YA that ...

    Sep 9
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Rot | Echoes Between Sky and Stone

    Hello, Vanz! I've read through the whole piece now and I have thoughts; some good, others not so much. Let's start with the good! The descriptions are great, especially the ...

    Sep 9
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Science Fiction Re: Chapter 1 | Ikara

    Well hello there, Juke! Let's get to it. First impressions: This is very well written from start to finish, and the characters feel unique, instantly identifiable, and very well written. ...

    Sep 8
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Lyrical Re: Visions Pt. 2

    Hello! Let's just jump into it. Her silver crown catches the flames light. Either flame's light, or flames' light. Also, "light" appears twice in quick succession and trips up the ...

    Sep 8
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Visions

    Hello hello! Very quick piece, and a very quick review to accompany. That being said, these four stanzas do more work, and do it BETTER, than most modern fantasy books ...

    Sep 8
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Crawlers - Chapter One: The Farm

    Hello Rev! What follows is the start of my long-promised review lolol. Also, can I just say? I read through the whole thing - which is rare for me to ...

    Sep 8
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Science Fiction Re: Lazarus II (Part One, chapter 1)

    Hello! Let's get to it. Just to be clear, I'm going to be brutally honest. TLDR: This piece has good bones, but needs a lot more meat before it's done. ...

    Sep 7
  • Short Story » Supernatural, Fantasy Re: Five haunting Richardson tales

    Not a full review! I loved the first 4 stories. I loved them. They're short, and very effective. There are some issues here and there with word-choice and sentence construction ...

    Sep 5
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Narrative Re: Haven Academy

    First things first: this kind of YA is not my cup of tea, and I don't want to, therefore, comment on characters, story, or setting. I am only going to ...

    Sep 5
  • Short Story » Literature, General Re: Here I await

    Right off the bat, I must wonder if this does not work better as a poem... but as it stands, it's not bad! However, the lyricality of it almost undermines ...

    Sep 5
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Fantasy Re: Hades' Depression

    First off; the atmosphere, tension, and mood of the piece is immediately palpable. That is an exceptionally difficult thing to do, and you've nailed it. Literally with the first sentence, ...

    Sep 3
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Horror Re: Sevenmile

    Read through it. It was thoroughly enjoyable and engaging throughout, and it kinda reminded me of Mitch Albom's writing style - which is exceptionally high praise. Maybe I'm not the ...

    Aug 31


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