EC4466

Short but sweet. Enjoyable little read but feels like it could have been bulked out a little more in some places.

This is chapter 1 of a longer story that is still in the works. The training scenario is a setup for later, where it will be shown with a lot ...

@canopy

Thank you for the feedback, it is much appreciated. I get what you're saying about paragraphs, I've been working on changing it up to try and slow the pace a ...

Thank you for the feedback, it was really appreciated. I'm glad the feelings of dread and anxeity came across, I was trying to get that feel when writing it. I ...

I like the concept, it's a very thought provoking idea and if done right can be a really, really powerful story forcing the reader to face their own choices and ...

This is quite a funny little poem. I like the pivot, from the start asking us what is wrong to reminding the reader we all did things that sounded silly ...

I like this concept, the premise works really well. I feel that some ellipses and pauses may do the dialogue some favours, slowing the pace a little bit and making ...