Kimberlykat

This poem reminds me of (Now I'm not sure if the naming is accurate) 'The Hawk' (Forgot author too). Well, like I always say, BRilliANT!

confused emotions, bitterness or..er..? Very moving but it sounds like your ripping up your shirt because the first stanza has a sweet scent but as it rolls on...I don't know. ...

Brilliant display of thoughts. Made me think of cold sweat and melting ice. Not forgetting the feeling of loneliness.

I'll try working on a stretched version.

Apart from critique, (Something I never do) It is put together perfectly. The introduction was great and transitions were made smooth. Overall, I would say this is something I would ...

Brilliant. Yeah, umm... It flowed beautifully but the end was rather random and unexpected, which is a good shock, but it sort of came on too hard. Otherwise I absolutely ...

I agree with Charlotte. The repetition worked incredibly well! Yes, your poetry has this bit to it that one can't exactly point a finger at. Interesting. Interesting poem, I know ...

Genious! Just wondering, is it ment to be read slow? God Bless- KIM

This is amazing! I really enjoy the repetition! It grasps a certain part of me. Great work, what can I say?

Great work Bubbles, very creative, yes! God Bless, KIM

Thank you all for the comments! appreciate it! Will hopefully find time to edit it and...yes, that. Thanks again! God Bless, KIM

It reminds me of E. E. Cummings "I carry your heart, I carry it in my heart" ...but a sadder, sorry and more regretful version here. Very emotional and interesting! ...

Yeah, cheers to you to Bubbles. I took your advise and cut it short! I hope it still sings out there entire meaning of the poem but yeah, thanks a ...

okay, first of all, wow! Brilliant and genius! I didn't really understand that last verse/stanza but the first two lines were great!!! Keep up the good work!

Brilliant piece. Amazing work!