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Taneantra's first Adventure

Riedawriter23 · 2007-01-06T08:50:53Z

Taneantra Letrans is 14-years-old and soon to be Queen of Remany, in any case, her whole life had been planned out since the beginning of time. Well, all of this is about to change. She soon comes to realize that just getting to the crown is going to be a struggle. Surprisingly on her way to her home country she meets an old childhood friend who in turn tells her that her life is in great danger. His father is Duke of Remany and wants her dead so he can take over Remany and put her people into slavery. He offers to take her to Hengelic, an island, to hide out with him until its safe but with some help of a new friend she feels to be just the opposite. She has two months of the summer to fight for her life, make major mistakes, and then leave to be crowned in a hurry, but will she want to go through with it when betrayal is in her path and she doesn’t know which way to turn?

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Sat Aug 18, 2007 6:42 pm

canislupis says... · Sat Aug 18, 2007 6:42 pm

from the punctuation point of view there are a few mistakes, and the sentences don't go very well together.

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It's like everyone tells a story about themselves inside their own head. Always. All the time. That story makes you what you are. We build ourselves out of that story.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind

Taneantra's first Adventure

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