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-KayJuran- · 2005-03-01T22:51:27Z

well when i saw the title, i didnt know what to expect - i thought maybe i should ignore it and pass on or something... (as you may realise, i dont like sappy stuff...) BUT THIS was not sappy! i havent read all of your work but this was just beautiful without being mushy or anything and i cant believe you thought it was!!! only improvement i can see would be to add some more punctuation - you dont have any question marks and not enough commas... i know i prob dont always have enough either but i'd like to know whether that was supposed to be part of the effect or whether you just didnt put any in... btw, what does the word 'segue' mean?... not wanting to sound stupid or anythin but i guess thats the reason we're all here - to learn from each other... if you dont mind, i might print this off and show my friends cause this is an amazing poem and you should be proud of it! i just hope all of your stuff is this good!!!

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The_Gift_of_Difference says... · Sun Apr 05, 2009 9:22 pm

How in the whole wide world is this SAPPY???? That was AWESOME!!!! I got completely hooked as so as I started reading! The imagery and word choice was fantastic! I utterly fail at punctuation so I'll let someone else do that...But that was just plain great.

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Warning: Sappy, may cause loss of apetite or vomitting

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