A Goodbye

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Last edited by TheEccentricScribe on Thu Nov 06, 2008 3:14 am, edited 2 times in total.




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I like it. :)

Although, I can't help thinking that stanza 4, line 1 finishes a word early. Couldn't you move 'love' up a line? (So that it reads, 'Maybe there in the stars the one you love/waits for you, but until then').
I wrote the above just for you.



For a short space of time I remained at the window watching the pallid lightnings that played above Mont Blanc and listening to the rushing of the Arve, which pursued its noise way beneath. The same lulling sounds acted as a lullaby to my too keen sensations; when I placed my head upon my pillow, sleep crept over me; I felt it as it came and blessed the giver of oblivion.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein