He will never love you.

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No one.
No one can be trusted.
A hand to be held, a hand to be wasted.
A mouth to be kissed, those lips will be gone.
That boy you knew, that boy is not the One.
He will tease you
hurt you
turn you insane.
Blame you
burn you
hit you
trick you.
He'll tear up your heart and never return.
He'll play those games;
you'll hate him in so many ways.
But you won't resist, oh no,
not when he kisses you
holds you...remember,
hand to hand,
lip to lip,
heart to heart,
he will never love you.
Last edited by thegirlwhofateloves on Thu Mar 30, 2006 1:15 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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No-one.


I think (not sure) this should be "no one".


But you won't resist, oh no,
not when he kisses you
holds you...remember,
hand to hand,
lip to lip,
heart to heart,
he will never love you.


Chilling! :(

An interesting approach to the traditional "I love him but he dosn't love me" theme.

Nice!! :wink:

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One word awsome you go girl
Just belive and you will acheive!




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this definitely was an entertaining piece and i enjoyed it. but i felt that :idea: it could have a better tiltle- perhaps a shorter one, i cant think of any as such but would like you to give it a thought. the phrase' he will tear up your heart and never return' is amazingly larger than life and yet s real and beautiful. the simplicity of language and expressions in the poem are worth praising!! :D
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I like how you put "he will never love you" right after "heart to heart." That was my favorite part of the poem. It's like, just as they're getting closest to each other, a wall appears coming from the fact that "he" will never love the author. Other than that line, there are some things I like and some I don't, but I can't really put a finger on which is which, so I'll just go with good job! :)




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Yay! I did something right for a change!! :elephant: well, kind of right lol....
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I am not much of a poetry afficionado, but I really did like this.
I've felt like this before. A lot.
Nice work.
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