Anyway, awesome job, you two! You'll be surprised but Drak, I've done stories like your's before.
HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
So, from the simple sentance; 'The moonlight poured into the room, illuminating my crouching figure.' We get a happy story of reunion, a sad story of running away, and a zombie story ^u^
Just shows you how diffrent we all think, no? ^u^ (I have ta say, i wasn't expecting the zombie one Drak ^^)
I am a Leaf on the Wind, Watch me Soar ~ Kyrie Eleison down the road that I must travel, Kyrie Eleison through darkness of the night
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HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
So, that explains why I ended up with something sad, you ended up with something happy/mischievous, and Drak with a horror/thriller.
So, writing styles, anyone?
HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
What do you think my writing style felt like then?
HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
It was really good ^u^ but you have the same quirk in your writing that I have ^^ to many commas ^^'' I have to watch myself and make sure I'm not combining, like, 3 sentances in one ^u^ It's an easy mistake that isn't serious and really doesn't affect the writing to much ^u^
I am a Leaf on the Wind, Watch me Soar ~ Kyrie Eleison down the road that I must travel, Kyrie Eleison through darkness of the night
Hehe...^^" Thank you. I know, I have to watch out for it. I was kind of hurrying that story down so I didn't really get to pay attention to the punctuation. Typical, airhead me. ^^"
Now yours. I think me and you have the same kind of writing style. You know, that urban feel. I didn't see much commas or anything in yours, so I can fully say that you're growing out of your "quirky" phase. Hehe!
So, moods? Atmospheres?
Or do you want to comment on Drak's writing style first?
HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
HERE>>OTAKU FOR LIFE<<HERE "People's feelings are memories that transcend time[that's why they're so hard to forget]." - Steins;Gate(Makise) "I'm not stupid. I'm just too lazy to show how smart I am." -Hyouka(Oreki)
Surround yourself with people who are serious about being writers, and who will tell you, ‘Hey—you can do better than this.’ Who will be critical of your work, but also supportive. And who will not be competitive in a negative way. — Isabel Quintero
