Thinking of you.

by Amberla93

  • Poetry
  • Dramatic · Lyrical

Published March 8, 2012

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I catch myself sometimes… thinking of nothing but you.
Tell me, how does one inform a heart that it’s through?
 
How does one escape when all other hope is gone?
When you know it’s for the best, but your heart holds on.
 
As much as I try, it’s a frustrating, and daunting task.
Making myself forget what I fought for, what I wanted to last.
 
It makes me sick to think that it was all in vain.
But maybe this way I’ll save myself further pain?
 
I keep telling myself it would be best to block you out.
Yet, the thought terrifies me that you shouldn’t doubt.
 
So here I am… all this time later, still unsure of what to do.
And here I am still unable to stop myself from thinking of you.
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JordanPierre2000
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JordanPierre2000 wrote a review Review · Mar 8, 2012

Hey Amberla!
This is great. it sounds Shakespearean and if you made this up yourself I think you have a very bright future. So now for the faults. First off it is to short in my opinion . when I look at poems like this I see about ten verses. Although its six verses, I am quite picky with that when I am reviewing poems like this. The poem appears to be telling the story. In my opinion I want a more in depth story in this poem. If you start with a story you should always continue it. I can isolate that it is telling the story of your heart with a guy? Butapart from that great work. Keep writing poems and eventually I will be ale to review one without any faults :)

Yours,

Jordan :)



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