oh wow, very powerful imagery and choice of words... casts a lot of coinciding emotions to the reader; I would not change a thing...
although... you might want to...
But I ca't find anything less than great about it, beautiful writing!
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The ending made me sad
, but yeah, nice job.
Lovin' it.