The Rose Garden

by DarkTestimonyofTruth

Published February 26, 2008

It's kind of short, but I like it. I wrote it a while ago, maybe two years, but it has always stuck with me.

Many a Rose
Has wilted and died,
But only to make room
For many a Rose to bloom.

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Teague
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Teague wrote a review Review · Feb 28, 2008

Aye, I agree with Alainna. This would be much better as a haiku -- I can't really see it as a full length poem, but that might just be beacuse it's so short. It feels like it should be haiku, though. 'Cause those are short, sweet, to the point, and potentially powerful. Which is what you have here.

*cough* Yes, I'm rambling. Love it. :D

-Saint Razorblade
The Official YWS Pirate :pirate3:

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Alainna
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Alainna commented Comment · Feb 27, 2008

This is very cute but too short to really call a poem. Why don't you try turning it into a haiku (especially seens as it's already about nature) or extending it into a full length poem, with a bit more structure?

All the best,
Alainna
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