I pick up the dart ready to shoot
my hands as still as water
my eyes opened widely
as if someone is pulling my eyes apart in different directions
my hands pull back
and throws the dart front
My eyes only on the dart and the dart board
when in a flash
you jump right out
distracting me from the dart and the dart board
now my eyes which were so focused one second ago
suddenly is now focused on you
If I follow my rubric
I should be mad
the only person that could make me brake my rubric
you made me take a break from the darts I was so blinded by
And enjoy every piece of you.
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I get what your trying at, its good but I would add more detail, setting, and its a bit fast paced. But besides that its like really good