I can't fall in love again Not when crises are high and the fear of it lives in you Not when you can't afford another heartbreak Not when your hopes and faith are shattered from the last Not when your heart still aches even after a long time Not when you have panic attacks thinking about it Not when you feverishly cried imagining it alone Not when other couples give you the ick And the hope that was once there Everything fell the moment I shattered Everything became a threat to me and my life Everything became dangerous Everything became wrong Everything became hauntingly impossible Everything felt like it would shatter my last moments of happiness Like it would achingly burn if I even tried to have hope again My heart cannot choose again My heart cannot love again My heart cannot tell me what to do again My heart cannot beat for another again My heart cannot create another hope again Before all that's left will be my soul Then came a new light Tell me why I feel this way Tell me why I get goosebumps thinking of him Tell me why I can't take him off my mind Tell me why, even though he's really annoying and crazy I don't hate him. Not really but I cannot open my heart again I cannot like him I cannot love again For I fear I'll break Why is he like this? Why does he like me? Questions like these make me wonder what the Universe is up to What kind of a story is this? O generous Universe and the Heavens above, please answer my questions clearly ...If not, please let him leave me alone. October 21st, 2026.
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I cannot say I relate much, having not been afforded the experience of such intense feelings, but I can tell you this: I don't think the Universe is up to anything. Your subject might eventually leave you alone, but these feelings, too, shall pass. The doors to your heart will open again, and perhaps, without even realising it, you'll find yourself loving again. Come back to this piece twelve months from now, then you'd discover your heart might have other plans, though your mind have already forbidden it.
That said, the way you've articulated your present feelings is remarkably intense. I cannot claim to understand them, but you've conveyed them so vividly that I can almost feel them. And perhaps that's the beauty of writing: making someone feel what they've never experienced.
I really liked this piece. The feelings felt very real, especially the fear of opening your heart again after being hurt. The lines about not being able to love again hit hard, and I liked how the mood slowly changed when the new person appeared. The ending made me smile a little because even though the speaker keeps saying they don't want to fall in love, it's pretty obvious they're starting to care. Nice job!