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if i had loved you in another timeline, in another century,
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i would have called you my knight, and waited for you
beneath the castle windows; i would have
written your name in margins of enchanted manuscripts,
so the whole book would smell like summer when i opened it.
i would meet you beneath the chapel arch
after vespers,
where the candles make everything gold,
and the stones smell like rain. perhaps you would
give me a flower stolen from the castle gardens,
and i would keep it until it turned brown.
and when you leave for war, i will stand at the gate
with your colors tied to my wrist, and watch as
the shape of your horse gets smaller the longer
you leave me.
i would return to my quarters and pray for your
return. and when you finally came back, i'd breathe
in the smell of winter on your coat.
my knight, would you return home
to me in this lifetime?
I enjoyed this poem. It has such a soft, dreamlike atmosphere to it, and the medieval imagery feels natural rather than simply decorative. I liked the detail of the book smelling like summer when opened; it is such a strange and beautiful image, and it makes the love feel preserved inside something physical. The final question works wonderfully because it brings that archaic yearning into the present.
I don't have much criticism. There are places where the longer lines make the rhythm stumble slightly, but I wouldn't make major changes to them. The breathlessness feels appropriate for something so wistful. The poem succeeds because it doesn't try too hard to explain its own emotion. It gives us the life the speaker wishes they had lived, and lets us feel the longing for it ourselves.
Thank you for this read.
What a beautiful and rich poem.
No critiques here, I just really enjoyed reading it and wanted you to know.
I was a little surprised when I opened this and it looked like a picture of a page from a book, not exactly what I was expecting. this poem was really pretty and had such a cool topic, how this one felt like a short story and a poem at the same time. I personally liked the ending line of "my knight, would you return home to me in this lifetime" it was sweet and well poetic. i really enjoyed reading this poem even though it wasn't super long
I LOVE THE LAYOUT OF THIS SM. it feels like i opened a book!!
This is so sweet. i feel like one could almost use these as wedding vows or smth