The Crystal Heart [Story is done, critiques needed]

by LisaMCooper

Published March 14, 2011

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TeenWRiTER Review
TeenWRiTER wrote a review Review · Mar 20, 2011

Um I was wondering what this is going to develop into??? I mean yea I have to admit it's pretty darn good. But what is it meaning??? Her heart is getting stolen by some guy but it really isn't going anywhere yet I need more . . . It has lovely potential though.

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LisaMCooper commented Comment · Mar 15, 2011

TabbyGirl wrote:HEY! So, I had to review this, because, you see, the topic ID is my zip code (crap, I shouldn't have let that slip...)

So, honestly, I really liked this... It was different, it was interesting... it was French! Cool... I, uh, don't have time for a real review, but yes, I liked this quite a lot.

I'm sure this didn't help you at all, sorry DX

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Tabby


Haha! No no, its quite alright! I actually found your comment amusing. :) And thank you, I needed that laughter and I thank you as well for the nice comment. :)

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TabbyGirl wrote a review Review · Mar 15, 2011

HEY! So, I had to review this, because, you see, the topic ID is my zip code (crap, I shouldn't have let that slip...)

So, honestly, I really liked this... It was different, it was interesting... it was French! Cool... I, uh, don't have time for a real review, but yes, I liked this quite a lot.

I'm sure this didn't help you at all, sorry DX

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Tabby

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GuardianAngel Review
GuardianAngel wrote a review Review · Mar 14, 2011

Hey there, :]

“I am stealing your heart,” the thief replied calmly, not even looking back at me as he lifted the crystal heart from its pedestal.


I was slightly confused at this point, however it somewhat cleared after a few sentences. Maybe a few more context clues could help that? Then again the mysterious factor is delightful.
Other than that the story was very well written, your characterization of the two is impeccable. I really enjoy seeing that you used two stark, contrasting characters, but meshed them so well. :]


~ Angel



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