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When the Moon Vanished

by Messenger

Published September 16, 2026

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Ten years ago, the moon vanished. From the moon came the tide, from the tide came the ocean, and from ocean came life. Life and the ocean were now fleeting.

For ten years Sheobe would wake to the sound of tinkling bells as his godmother weaved on her loom outside their marauding tent. Such was the case once again. He rolled out of his hammock with a groan and tied on his jaguar pelt skirt. Out in the blazing red sun she worked away. Her tongue hung over her cracked and aged lips, and her silver hair and deep green dress – adorned with gold bells on every border that jingled different notes– was soaked with sweat.

“Good morning, Godmother,” Sheobe said. He held up a hand to block the sun’s glare and better get a glimpse of her work. Another massive scale was nearly complete, this one as purple as the ripest plum. His mouth watered at the remembrance of the fleshy, juicy fruit.

“Good morning, my son,” she said without breaking concentration.

“Ready for another trip to the ocean?”

 “I am.”

 Every year she weaved scales of indigo, turquoise, and algae green, pile them in a cart, and disappear over the horizon, farther and farther with the receding waters, returning with a empty barrow.

“You will be gone many days?”

“If I return at all.”

Sheobe frowned. “You shouldn’t say such things.”

“And you should be headed to the temple to pray.”

Sheobe sank to his knees. “Why? It never does any good. Either Coyomettiz is dead, or she does not care for us.”

“You used to believe.”

“The ocean used to crash on the dry dirt where we are now sitting.”

“So, what then, roast like a date as you drown your sorrows like your father has”

Sheobe balled his fists. If his neck could even get any hotter, it did. “He prayed as well and nothing changed.” He paused. “I do not wish to be like him though, or these silent gods and goddesses - if they even exist.”

“They do exist, Sheobe, they always have. Remember?” She turned from her loom for the first time and rattled the bells in a melody as she sang the nursery rhyme he’d heard a thousand times.

“The Sun is the Son of Celestial bodies,

The moon is the daughter of this world.

When the moon rebelled the Celestials commands,

At the earth she was violently hurled.”

“So where is she?” Sheobe threw his hands up. “The night remains black as the crow. And what does all that gibberish mean? The moon didn’t crash into the earth, it disappeared.”

His godmother tossed the last scale into the wheelbarrow. “Things are not always as they seem. But it does seem like I will not change your mind today, so run along and play.”

Sheobe stood, but looking around, it was all so desolate. Whale carcasses rose up as substitutes for trees, fish bones littered the dirt, and heaps of dried algae provided the only dark color in the landscape. What was left of his wandering village were the empty tents and the dark cloth temple in the center where many sank to their knees and prayed. Those who had wandered from the faith huddled on the outskirts, kicking rocks, wasting away the time in anger and regret. Both seemed like terrible choices.

“Can I come with you? If we are all going to die, It has been so long since I saw the ocean.”

His godmother pursed her lips. “You will be surprised at what you see. You will weep.”

“I was born weeping beside the ocean, let it end the same way.”

“Very well. Keep up then, son. Time is melting away.”

They trekked for four days. Talking was hard in the life-sapping heat of the sun, and Godmother’s small water pouch was empty by the end of day two. On the fifth morning Sheobe spotted white specks on the horizon. If they were mirages, they kept getting bigger, and by evening the specks began to take the shape of tents. Rows and rows and rows of tents. A few sea gulls flew over top, a rare sight for Sheobe.

“Stay close,” God mother said.

Soon they arrived. There had to be thousands of tents. People milled about in the cooler evening light, most in hushed tones, with occasional rowdy pockets determined to enjoy their remaining time. The disparity reminded Sheobe of home. He wondered if his father even knew he had left. He pinched his nose as they entered the mass of tents, and the stench of fish and unwashed bodies wafted through the air like a thick cloud trying to suffocate him. Here airflow was restricted, and if there was anything in his stomach, he might have wretched.

Sheobe felt all eyes on him as they snaked through. Voices got louder. They broke from the tents and there it was. The ocean. Or what was left of it. Sheobe frowned. Brown, limp waves rolled up on a muddy shore covered in dead fish and sea snakes. And just on the horizon Sheobe saw the other side, just as crowded. He gulped. The world had really, truly, come to an end. Was this the last water source on earth? Why did Godmother keep returning to this?

A man approached with yellow, crooked teeth, hair going in every direction of both his head and his face. He eyed Sheobe and his godmother up and down as he ran a thumb over the thick dagger in his waistband.

“What do you think you’re doing here, old hag?”

“I have come to see the ocean,” she said, head bowed and hand up in humility.

“Can’t be letting just anyone near the water. Could contaminate it, or worse. I’m afraid this as far as you’re going.”

Sheobe balled his fists but said nothing. His godmother had been here before. He hoped she had a plan. 

She looked back on him. “Remember, things are not always as they seem.” She stood straight and faced the gross man. “You look hungry. Why don’t you take the boy and let me pass through.”

Sheobe choked, and for a moment was convinced that he must have heard her wrong, but the man smiled wide like a wildcat. “You wouldn’t be worth my time anyway,” he said. “We have a deal.”

“Godmother!”

The man lunged forward and grabbed Sheobe by both shoulders. He screamed and tried to wrestle away, but a swift blow to the throat sent him staggering to the ground where warm mud smashed into his hair, and the ground punched the air from his lungs. The man dragged him up by his hair. It felt like driving nails into every inch of his scalp.

“Sun’s going down, so we’ll keep you nice and fresh until morning,”

Before he could drag Sheobe away Godmother rattled on toward the ocean with her wheelbarrow. She drove straight into the ocean. The weaved scales tumbled out the front and floated on the surface for a moment before soaking up as much as they could carry and then sinking. Godmother turned her back to the sea and winked at Sheobe. 

Before Quezota burns this world

Her new body she must weave.

But water is the mother of life

And soon the ocean will leave

She collapsed backward. The crash washed waves over her and she sank like the scales. Then a shockwave burst below the surface and the waves leaped towards the shore in giant heaps of foam. Silver sparks splattered in every direction, then blinding beams of moonlight shot to the sky.

The cannibal released Sheobe to cover his eyes, and in that moment Sheobe sprinted toward the light. White foam curled all about, and then every scale Godmother had ever weaved floated to the surface, no longer thread, glowing like moonlight on the water. A great gust of wind began to swirl, scooping each one in its arms and stacking them one over the other in a serpentine pattern. Higher and higher they went, forming a tail, a body, and the cunning head of a viper. Some threads formed into a waving beard and vibrant plumage on the back, Foam hardened into a set of ivory horns, teeth, eyeballs, and nostrils.

The great sea dragon swirled above the center of the ocean. People clambered out of every tent and hovel. All eyes turned to the beast that Sheobe could not believe he was seeing. Even the knife of the man ready to eat him seconds before buried itself in the sand as he fell, prostrate.

“My sons and daughters.” The voice exploded over the ocean and the sky boomed with thunder. Wind snatched every last tent and flung it out of sight. “Do not fear. Your goddess has returned.” Lightning split the sky and every hair on Sheobe’s body raised in static terror.

“Banished for coming to your defense yet risen again having broken from captivity. I will never forsake this good earth I was born to protect. I am Coyomettiz, and this is my people.”

Coyomettiz plunged toward the ocean. Many rushed to the shore while others cowered in fear. Sheobe felt fastened to the mud where he stood. The dragoness hit the water with cosmic force, and from this great plunge came rolling waters. Waves crashed on shore and sent man and beast spilling over like pins.

Sheobe took a deep breath and plugged his nose before the monstrous wave shoved him backwards. He tumbled head over heels and banged off innumerable objects in the dark waters. Up was down, down was sideways, and his lungs burned as the he rolled. When the corners of his vision turned red, and the weight of his head seemed to come off his shoulders, he careened onto dry ground.

He sputtered and staggered all about, trying to orientate himself. The best he could do was sink to all fours and close his eyes until the spinning stopped. All around he could hear the others. Weeping and worshiping their deliverance. A rush of wind blew his hair back and tugged at his eyelids. He could feel the magnificent presence before he opened his eyes. Giant green ones stared back just inches from his face. Warm breath washed over him.

He shuddered despite his best efforts, and the lump in his throat was so great he thought he would cry.

“Hello, son.” Coyomettiz’s voice was loud, and yet oh so comforting, like a cool blanket wrapping around his body, invading his nostrils, hugging his heart, and whispering in his ears.

“You came back,” was all Sheobe got out.

“I never left.”

“I doubted you. But now I believe.”

“You were human. And you were right. I disappeared. But not out of choice. When Quezota, the Sun god, tried to sacrifice Earth to the Celestials, I said no. I was born of Earth, and created to protect and serve her. For that they cast me to humanity. I walked among you for ten years until I could reconstruct my body.”

Sheobe leaned forward in an awkward hug atop her snout. His emotions, strung out on the edge of cliff, tumbled over and he wept.

She let him be still for a moment and then raised him to his feet. “Now I must go, but I will not leave you.”

Sheobe stepped back, wiping hot tears away. Coyomettiz rose above him, coiled her massive body like a whip, and with a crack like an earthquake, she bolted into the sky amid a streak of white light. For a moment all was calm and all was black in the heavens above. Then a giant spark lit up the sky.

The moon had returned. Sheobe thought the crescent looked much like a resting sea dragon. It began to spread, and soon a full moon shone down with warmth only a godmother could bestow. The foamy tide lapped at Sheobe’s feet.

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Tikaya
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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Sep 26

So let’s see where was I. Impressed by the Moon disappearing etc.

“Good morning, my son,” she said without breaking concentration.
“Ready for another trip to the ocean?”
“I am.”
I feel like it’s really hard to get who says what. I kinda wish you would add some more descriptions around your dialogue here, just to properly settle me with your characters ☹
That’s an issue that I feel continues beyond just this point of confusion.

“The ocean used to crash on the dry dirt where we are now sitting.”
That said this is a good argument!
The dialogue after this one is lacking punctuation tho, might want to edit that in while you’re already at it XD

Hmm I find it so fascinating that for me the sun is a gal and the moon is a guy (“Die Sonne” and “der Mond” =D) but this is like the third thing I read today where the genders are sun = guy, moon = girl!
Nice poem tho! I am curious abt the religion in this, call me intrigued :3

Wild speculation, something is blocking out the moon. Maybe a spaceship. (yes yes I know the gravity of the moon is gone. Means the moon is gone. Means no space ship. Maybe a spaceship is the reason why the moon is gone. I am sleep-deprived.)

I like your descriptions of his surroundings. Very poignant.

If we are all going to die, It has been so long since I saw the ocean.

Why is It capitalized here? It feels like there’s a sentence part missing after “going to die”?

I am surprised that he didn’t immediately ask to be taken along :3

“I was born weeping beside the ocean, let it end the same way.”
Nice argument!

Uhm time may be melting but wasn’t she busy with the loom like 3 seconds ago? I don’t understand the logistics and then you do a time jump of 4 days @.@

I am a bit unmoored by you not really describing how many ppl are living with the godmother. Where was his father in all this? Yes, you described the whale forest, very nice, but who else lives there? Now we have a tent city but if we had a contrast to how he used to live, this would work even better?

Why did Godmother keep returning to this?
I like that he wonders this. It brings this up in the readers’ mind too, to think abt it!

Ohaaa I did not think she would offer him up!!
And that this would turn violent so quickly! Not at they seem, huh? I wonder who his godmother is? The fallen goddess herself?

Now I wonder if the “scale” she weaved where something I should have payed closer attention to? I just figured it is some unfamiliar term of weaving that I just have to accept not knowing and hoping that I understand the story anyway. Was it special after all?

Before he could drag Sheobe away
Shouldn’t this be “while” he dragged Sheobe away because you didn’t describe the guy stopping to gawk at the ocean?

Another interesting poem! My theory that she is the goddess has got another data point. She does the weaving of scales after all. I also wonder what it means that this dirty, mudbrown ocean is “leaving”. Reducing even further?

Also I am so confused abt the logistics. Why was this random guy making her wait away from the water when she does this water show whenever she reaches the ocean? So ppl should know this would happen (I certainly wouldn’t forget magic like this) And if this isn’t happening every day… why now? Why was she stopped in the first place. I need answers XD

Ohhh I think I know what serpent you are describing! What a beauty!

I like that these people immediately believe the miracle they have witnessed.
I do wonder why she told him he would weep when he came with her. If she knew she had enough to transform back into her true self. That feels… unsatisfying.

That said I like how you structured this. I also like how you describe when you choose to actually describe things. That works very well :3

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Messenger replied · Sep 26

hey tik. This was for a 2k word short story contest so yes some things are a but rushed for my style. I think i bit off more than I could chew tbh and had to rewrite it many times to get it coherent and concise enough to wrap up

Tikaya replied · Sep 28

i know, you mentioned that in the other reviews. I think the ending isn't that rushed, more the transition to it XD

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Tikaya commented Comment · Sep 26

Well then Messy, let’s head into your short story instead =D

Oha!! Well that is a starting sentence if I’ve ever read one.
This feels very lyrical, in the way you spaced this out. It makes me think of This Is How You Lose The Time War (or rather how I envision it to look like since I’ve only ever heard ppl talk abt it-ppl like my wife)

I wonder what you mean by the moon vanishing making the oceans flee. Bc the water still stays where it is, there just won’t be any more tides right?

And just like TIHYLTTW (or how I imagine it to be) I don’t think I can fully appreciate the way you tell the story. The broken up sentences make it difficult for me to follow the narration and this is what I’m here for. It might be artistically very beautiful and meaningful but… this is not rly for me. Kinda how the wife refused to do proper paragraphing and driving me mad over it XD

Arrrrgghh the spacing is starting to give me anxiety.

Ok, I can’t read this. It’s not for me. Have this comment instead and I hope you have a great day Messy XD

Messenger replied · Sep 26

aah i am so sorry. I copied it from the pdf and it single spaced everything. It should be all good now!

Tikaya replied · Sep 26

alrighty. Let's see if it allows me to review this despite having already posted a comment on it =D

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AlexWrites wrote a review Review · Sep 17

Hey, Mess! It's been a while since I reviewed a work by you, so I thought to pick this work when I browsing through the Green Room for completing The Checklist Challenge. Hope you don't mind, now let's dive right in~

Ten years ago, the moon vanished. From the moon came the tide, from the tide came the ocean, and from ocean came life. Life and the ocean were now fleeting.

I find the premise and concept quite thrilling! I wonder how you'll explain/solve it and how much of the story actually revolves around this kinda apocalyptic occurence.

godmother

I see, what happened to his actual parents and what seems to be the Sheobe's actual relationship with his godmother? I feel like we're missing a backstory here.

jaguar pelt skirt

Uhh, is a guy wearing a skirt? Also, I think you meant 'belt'!

“If I return at all.”

There's the pet-phrase of all aged people, at least where I'm from lol. I get a somber vibe from this, but the association is just a little too comical, forgive me XD

“And you should be headed to the temple to pray.”

Godmother really be being her age, very typical =)

“Why? It never does any good. Either Coyomettiz is dead, or she does not care for us.”
“You used to believe.”

Either the Godmother is gaslighting Sheobe (like wdym broccoli is you favourite!), or something happened to turn Sheobe away from his faith or the situation is truly so dire that praying seems worthless. Either of these are great ways to proceed if done correctly!

“The ocean used to crash on the dry dirt where we are now sitting.”
“So, what then, roast like a date as you drown your sorrows like your father has”

It really seems the disaster is pretty bad, I'm surprised it took long for the narrative to present that. But then again, I understand trying to keep the pace natural. The daddy issues now- I'm much more curious about that. Especially since I've already been asking about his real parents, and how the Godmother is related to them. It could be his actual grandmother as how obviously you've written her here, but I don't find anything solid to base my guess on?

She turned from her loom for the first time and rattled the bells in a melody as she sang the nursery rhyme he’d heard a thousand times.
“The Sun is the Son of Celestial bodies,
The moon is the daughter of this world.
When the moon rebelled the Celestials commands,
At the earth she was violently hurled.”

Old ladies and their obsession with rhymes- you've certainly portrayed the stereotype impeccably! I quite like the rhymes and lore though, I wonder if the story's some fantasy tale in which this story is actually true, guess we'll see though. But at the moment atleast, it just seems like the legacy of a legend passed for generations, that the Godmother uses as an excuse to keep the hope alive. I can't really blame her for that, these truly seem like dark times!

The moon didn’t crash into the earth, it disappeared.

Ah, so the kids calls out the annoying logic in a nursery rhyme! Looks like someone is in their rebellious phase XD

so run along and play.

...how young exactly is Sheobe? @_@ I thought we were talking about a late teenager here.. Well they also play, but I don't think we refer to sports then this way. I suppose it can be a cultural difference though, not like I'd know since I barely played myself.

Whale carcasses rose up as substitutes for trees, fish bones littered the dirt, and heaps of dried algae provided the only dark color in the landscape.

Oh my, that's so bad! The descriptive writing is extremely impactful though, go great work. I especially love how you lay the contrast between what was previously there and what it has been replaced- really brings out the imagery wonderfully.

What was left of his wandering village were the empty tents and the dark cloth temple in the center where many sank to their knees and prayed. Those who had wandered from the faith huddled on the outskirts, kicking rocks, wasting away the time in anger and regret. Both seemed like terrible choices.

Wow, it seems like Sheobe isn't the only one with wavering faith. But in this circumstance, I find it most reasonable. In fact, I think it's the Godmother's baseless optimism that seems vain instead. Is she too afraid to admit the reality? Anyways, loved the last line too- saying both choices are equally terrible highlights this sense of sensibility that aids the apocalyptic genre.

“Can I come with you? If we are all going to die, It has been so long since I saw the ocean.” His godmother pursed her lips. “You will be surprised at what you see. You will weep.”
“I was born weeping beside the ocean, let it end the same way.”

Damn, the mention that Sheobe may weep at the sight of water is so chilling to read! A painful reminder that we don't really appreciate things enough before they're gone. I wonder what it means that he was born that way though- did the sea extend to their house when he born?

Time is melting away/wafted through the air like a thick cloud trying to suffocate him/they snaked through

A huge fine how you have such a prominent poetic voice, even for a near horror-prose <3

with occasional rowdy pockets determined to enjoy their remaining time

Very impressed with how realistically you portray the different demographics and mentalists, really compliments the awesome writing!

The ocean. Or what was left of it. Sheobe frowned. Brown, limp waves rolled up on a muddy shore covered in dead fish and sea snakes. And just on the horizon Sheobe saw the other side, just as crowded. He gulped. The world had really, truly, come to an end.

This makes me near sick.. Guess the Godmother was right about the scene making one cry, I just never imagined LIKE THIS. I don't think you'd find an unconscious man around such water in our world, at least not today. Such a compelling view to get your point across to the narrator!

Was this the last water source on earth? Why did Godmother keep returning to this?

About the first part- can they actually ever be sure? But then again, the story also has some mysterious fantasy element going on, so I gotta let it take some liberties. About the second part- I'm hooked. Does she know something we don't? Is this a consequence of a nefarious operation she's a part of or does it hold some emotional significance to her?

I’m afraid this as far as you’re going.

Uh-huh, it looks like a turn for the worse..

His godmother had been here before. He hoped she had a plan.

I second Sheobe, maybe she has dealt with similar people before given how frequently she comes here and thus could get them out with ease?

She looked back on him. “Remember, things are not always as they seem.” She stood straight and faced the gross man. “You look hungry. Why don’t you take the boy and let me pass through.” Sheobe choked, and for a moment was convinced that he must have heard her wrong, but the man smiled wide like a wildcat. “You wouldn’t be worth my time anyway,” he said. “We have a deal.” “Godmother!”

WHAT THE HELL?! Mess, is she a sacrificial witch? @_@
But her last statement seems really strange, what did we she mean?

Godmother turned her back to the sea and winked at Sheobe.
Before Quezota burns this world
Her new body she must weave.
But water is the mother of life
And soon the ocean will leave

Oh! Guess it's a part of her plan afterall. Weaving a body.. is that what Godmother has been doing all along?

The cannibal released Sheobe to cover his eyes, and in that moment Sheobe sprinted toward the light.

The transformation seems epic, but I'm glad Sheobe got out! That was a dangerous position to be in for a kid.

Higher and higher they went, forming a tail, a body, and the cunning head of a viper.

A snake God? This keeps getting more and more interesting..

“Do not fear. Your goddess has returned.”

Was the Godmother the Goddess? My, what a twist!

“Banished for coming to your defense yet risen again having broken from captivity. I will never forsake this good earth I was born to protect. I am Coyomettiz, and this is my people.”

It seems it wasn't a choice really, I guess I understand her helplessness. But why wait this long?

“You came back,” was all Sheobe got out.
“I never left.”
“I doubted you. But now I believe.”

Love this exchange, Mess <3 such a cinematic feeling!

You were human. And you were right. I disappeared. But not out of choice. When Quezota, the Sun god, tried to sacrifice Earth to the Celestials, I said no. I was born of Earth, and created to protect and serve her. For that they cast me to humanity. I walked among you for ten years until I could reconstruct my body.”

Such selfless devotion, I'm glad to finally have some explanation too.

The foamy tide lapped at Sheobe’s feet.

And the perfect ending! ^-^

Overall thoughts now! Okay the writing is spectacular- the metaphors, imagery, the poetic descriptions and the grave setting. You did an awfully good job of blending different genres like fantasy, mystery, film and apocalypse too. For a story that ended with one of the main characters ending up a dragon goddess, the story was framed incredibly realistically otherwise. One thing you didn't really clarify is what happened to the actual parents. But I guess you didn't HAVE to cover everything for a short story, and the purpose was served without it- so not that big a deal.

One thing I'd really recommend working on is formatting / paragraphing. I think an error occurred while publishing, perhaps you could look into it? Because this was a pain to read because of only that. I'm sure there must be some way to fix this..

Anyways, that's all for now. This was a wonderful read, thanks for sharing. Keep writing, Mess and I hope I get to review for you soon enough. Until next time~

Love, Alex

Messenger replied · Sep 17

haha thanks for the enthusiasm. I forgot to disclaim that this was a 2k short story for a competition I was in so that might be part of why some of it feels truncated. I may have to explore this in a larger way at some point.
Also yes, this had a South American inspiration so they do in fact where jaguar melts as skirts and clothing in general. And yes, Sheobe was born on the shores of the ocean.
The formatting I didnt realize. I copied it over from the pdf while on my phone and didnt even think about the double spacing it would cause

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hira wrote a review Review · Sep 17

Hey! I liked this, the premise of which hooked me right away. Having the moon disappear and the ocean die with it was a nice touch, as was tying it into the myth of Coyomettiz and Quezota. The nursery rhyme was also a nice way to show the reader that there was more to the moon's disappearance than Sheobe was initially let on.

Sheobe was my favorite character in this, as his impatience with the gods and the internal conflict between his belief and lack thereof made his eventual reaction to Coyomettiz's reappearance all the more satisfying. His dynamic with his godmother was also nice, if only because her cryptic remarks had more weight later on.

The transformation of the woven scales into the sea dragon was, for me, the most impressive part of the narrative - the imagery was particularly evocative, and the eventual reappearance of the moon was a fitting end to the tale, one that tied everything together nicely. The comparison between it and the sea dragon in the ending stanza was especially picturesque.

Some sentences are a bit of a read, grammatically speaking. There were also parts where the description ran on a bit too long, or tried to do too many things at once. The jump between Sheobe's capture and the godmother's sacrifice felt a bit abrupt, in my opinion - there could have been more build-up there.

All in all, however, it was a very well-written piece blending multiple mythological elements together with some very nice imagery. The way the connection between the moon, ocean, and goddess was displayed was particularly endearing, and the imagery in general was very evocative. Well done! <3

Messenger replied · Sep 17

Some sentences are a bit of a read, grammatically speaking. There were also parts where the description ran on a bit too long, or tried to do too many things at once. The jump between Sheobe's capture and the godmother's sacrifice felt a bit abrupt, in my opinion - there could have been more build-up there.

Id love to know any specific places where it tripped you up!
And yes, sorry, I forgot to put a note thst this was for a contest and I could not go over 2000 words so some bit may have overstretched my capabilities



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