She has curly hair
Like the step mom of Rapunzel
She has a big grin
And her teeth is all green
She is your Snow White
Be careful, she’ll bite
She isn’t a vampire
But her teeth looks like wire
She need to meet you at midnight
Oh here comes your future wife
Is she Cinderella?
Why does her face looks like a gorilla?
Here’s a call for Beauty,
Mister you are Beast, she is Beauty
Oh no let us change the history
Make it “ Beasty and the Beast”
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Hm...well, personally, I don't think it's one of your better works.
I should really leave it alone, it's your thing, but who knows? Whatever. Life is unpredictable, no?
Also, in the second stanza, shouldn't it be "look" instead of "looks"?
However, I really do enjoy the end. It put humour into the poem.
You're making me want to move on to satire and write it.
Fleet OUT!!
I like the general idea, but I would change a few things. Here is the poem in my revised way(reworded and fixed a few grammar thingers):
"She has curly hair
Like the stepmom of Rapunzel
She has a big grin
With her teeth all green
She is your Snow White
Be careful, she'll bite
She's not a vampire
But her teeth are like wire
She needs to meet you at midnight
Oh here comes your future wife
Is she Cinderella?
Why does her face look like a gorilla?
Here's a call for Beauty,
Mister you are the Beast, as she is Beauty
Or shall we change the history
Let's make it "Beasty and the Beast""
That's just how I would have written it, but I think you like it your way better.
Overall good job, I like the Disney princesses included in the poem, it makes it unique.