Published June 13, 2009
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Dude, this is a great story. Every time I finsh reading a chapter, I find myself laughing at how brilliantly-well Andrew is written. The development here is improving with each chapter, and I hate to say it, I'm having a hard time finding fault with anything, critique-wise.
I'd only suggest one thing, and it's not that big of a deal, as it is. It wouldn't hurt to refresh the reader's mind when it comes to vocabulary and terms for debate, because I haven't read any of the previous chapters in a long while, and I had some difficulty following exactly what was going on during the debate. Otherwise, once again, I'm a very, very satisfied man.